Haiku revisited
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Haiku revisited
I have a hankering for some Haiku. Do we dare see if we can break our previous Haiku record? I think we had close to 200 posts on our old Haiku thread.
To recap: Haiku is a form of traditional Japanese poetry. Haiku is a 17-syllable verse form consisting of three metrical units of 5, 7, and 5 syllables.
That said, our mission is to post a Haiku that describes a person, place or thing in an Ellis Paul song. Let's guess the answer to one Haiku before moving on to another.
We'll start with a really easy one.
My life is loose ends
But time stands still when I whirl
Step through my black hole
Who am I?
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To recap: Haiku is a form of traditional Japanese poetry. Haiku is a 17-syllable verse form consisting of three metrical units of 5, 7, and 5 syllables.
That said, our mission is to post a Haiku that describes a person, place or thing in an Ellis Paul song. Let's guess the answer to one Haiku before moving on to another.
We'll start with a really easy one.
My life is loose ends
But time stands still when I whirl
Step through my black hole
Who am I?
KarenZ
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Jeezum crow guys...I couldn't have made this any easier. Are we all Haiku-ed out or what? Say it isn't so!
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"Some people are born to make great art and others are born to appreciate it. It is a kind of talent in itself, to be an audience, whether you are the spectator in the gallery or you are listening to the voice of the world's greatest soprano. Not everyone can be the artist. There have to be those who witness the art, who love and appreciate what they have been privileged to see." -- Ann Patchett in Bel Canto.
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I am so bad at these Karen. Maria?
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Yay! You got it! Who's going next?
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"Some people are born to make great art and others are born to appreciate it. It is a kind of talent in itself, to be an audience, whether you are the spectator in the gallery or you are listening to the voice of the world's greatest soprano. Not everyone can be the artist. There have to be those who witness the art, who love and appreciate what they have been privileged to see." -- Ann Patchett in Bel Canto.
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Jeff,
Are you kidding me? The first try!!! I was totally guessing on memory
of that fine song. I think it was the word that [numbered] that had me thinking 7 . And of of course old love[ 2nd line ]
Anyway, wow, I'm stoked.
Not sure if mine is done the right way.
I was not in on the first haiku thread that reached 200 posts.
Will see in the morning?
Ask for a rewrite if necessary guys......or clues
Are you kidding me? The first try!!! I was totally guessing on memory
of that fine song. I think it was the word that [numbered] that had me thinking 7 . And of of course old love[ 2nd line ]
Anyway, wow, I'm stoked.
Not sure if mine is done the right way.
I was not in on the first haiku thread that reached 200 posts.
Will see in the morning?
Ask for a rewrite if necessary guys......or clues
"once we're inside, it's a carnival ride" ~ ellis paul
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I like Karen's suggestion to guess the current Haiku before putting another one on the table.
So Paddy's is up:
Sue Ellen
So Paddy's is up:
open your eyes now
his life over, just like that
fire hose, not just yet
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I like Karen's suggestion too. I was in the process of creating and posting mine when Jeff snuck his in there. I was surprised to see his when I FINALLY got mine up there.
A word to the wise - - - or at least all of you wiser than me.
I may have misunderstood this song entirely, rendering my first ever haiku for the most part null and void. Went back to the lyrics to the song and realized what may be my mistake.
I really believed that one of three people had passed. Upon further review, I'm just not sure. Ellis, if you're reading this one, a lil help.
Until then, I want to tweak my haiku just a bit. Work off either, same result.
Is that him?, look see
sunny,bright, mourning alright
can't stand or think straight
A word to the wise - - - or at least all of you wiser than me.
I may have misunderstood this song entirely, rendering my first ever haiku for the most part null and void. Went back to the lyrics to the song and realized what may be my mistake.
I really believed that one of three people had passed. Upon further review, I'm just not sure. Ellis, if you're reading this one, a lil help.
Until then, I want to tweak my haiku just a bit. Work off either, same result.
Is that him?, look see
sunny,bright, mourning alright
can't stand or think straight
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Wendy,
Thank You ever so much. You are of course Correct!!!!!
I'll be happy to try and solve these way more than being on stage
hoping someone can figure out just what the hec I'm talking about?
I just always thought this song, my first Ellis song, was about a man who had just died. I never really glanced lyrics, ever.
I'll improve, I will
Thank You ever so much. You are of course Correct!!!!!
I'll be happy to try and solve these way more than being on stage
hoping someone can figure out just what the hec I'm talking about?
I just always thought this song, my first Ellis song, was about a man who had just died. I never really glanced lyrics, ever.
I'll improve, I will
"once we're inside, it's a carnival ride" ~ ellis paul
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Please allow me. It's short. It was my first. The legacy 2 version that is. I believe Ellis was not thrilled with the mix of this song as it appears on The Windham Hill released legacy 2. I think it was a surprise to Ellis when he heard the final version. Hey Ellis, if they were sweet mistakes, I say, God Bless Will Ackerman.
Ashes To Dust
from the album Urban Folk Songs
Wake up Mother I think he's coming home
I guess he grew tired of living on his own
And here I sit bewildered, wondering if I've grown
Staring out the window and waiting on the phone
(Chorus)
You see I believed in alibis, broken glass and lullabies
Born was I in the 70's
Born to catch the sun
But I'm burned alive in memories
To ashes and dust I run, I run
Wake up mother I think he's coming home
I guess he grew tired of living on his own
And here I sit bewildered, staring through the pane
The glass it is still shattered...and everything remains unchanged.
(Repeat Chorus)
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Ashes To Dust
from the album Urban Folk Songs
Wake up Mother I think he's coming home
I guess he grew tired of living on his own
And here I sit bewildered, wondering if I've grown
Staring out the window and waiting on the phone
(Chorus)
You see I believed in alibis, broken glass and lullabies
Born was I in the 70's
Born to catch the sun
But I'm burned alive in memories
To ashes and dust I run, I run
Wake up mother I think he's coming home
I guess he grew tired of living on his own
And here I sit bewildered, staring through the pane
The glass it is still shattered...and everything remains unchanged.
(Repeat Chorus)
Copyright Ellis Paul Publishing -- SESAC
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Paddy, good one
Hint: This is a place and a thing.
I'm still and I'm cold
He casts a shadow o'er me
Look close, see yourself.
What am I
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Hint: This is a place and a thing.
I'm still and I'm cold
He casts a shadow o'er me
Look close, see yourself.
What am I
KarenZ
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I'm still and I'm cold
He casts a shadow o'er me
Look close, see yourself.
What am I
Karen, here's my wild guess:
The solace of Kathy's roof top in NYC, while 60 million light bulbs(Edison's fault) allow the skyline to swallow the moon. Upon close inspection, I do in fact see myself, because this is paddyinthepub's song!
Good one Karen, now please watch my back and lie to me if I'm wrong.
"once we're inside, it's a carnival ride" ~ ellis paul
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Paddy,
I cannot tell a lie. You're wrong.
Remember the hint....it's a location that could also be considered a thing.
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I cannot tell a lie. You're wrong.
Remember the hint....it's a location that could also be considered a thing.
KarenZ
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Paddy, those are your guesses? (Surface of mars? Face of the moon?)
If so...sorry...still wrong. Hmmm...maybe we need another clue...the he who is casting a shadow is a pretty big clue....
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If so...sorry...still wrong. Hmmm...maybe we need another clue...the he who is casting a shadow is a pretty big clue....
KarenZ
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mornin, not sure i have this one and will stay out in left field
for awhile if that's ok. So now playing left field for the ellis forum all-stars:
paddyinthepub: bats right; throws right; average speed on the base paths
But HIS guesses are clearly out of left field. For example:
Karen, is it Godzilla in Japan?
for awhile if that's ok. So now playing left field for the ellis forum all-stars:
paddyinthepub: bats right; throws right; average speed on the base paths
But HIS guesses are clearly out of left field. For example:
Karen, is it Godzilla in Japan?
"once we're inside, it's a carnival ride" ~ ellis paul
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Patti,
Yes...it's the reflecting pool....and welcome to the new board
Paddy, you were close
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Yes...it's the reflecting pool....and welcome to the new board
Paddy, you were close
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There is an expression for that tho it escapes me now. Way to go patti!!!
As usual, I'm a minute late and a dollar short { ep pin reference }.
Pat on my own back for ALMOST gettin it tho, finally! My expression for that is a quote from Van the man.." come a ty yigh yippie "
Who's next to try?
As usual, I'm a minute late and a dollar short { ep pin reference }.
Pat on my own back for ALMOST gettin it tho, finally! My expression for that is a quote from Van the man.." come a ty yigh yippie "
Who's next to try?
"once we're inside, it's a carnival ride" ~ ellis paul
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Hope my haiku above was not too obscure; after re-reading just now it looks like it is.
So here is a clue......it is a thing that most folks enjoy, is chalk full of possibilities, and not to be taken for granted.
There, I'm feeling better now.
Good luck!
So here is a clue......it is a thing that most folks enjoy, is chalk full of possibilities, and not to be taken for granted.
There, I'm feeling better now.
Good luck!
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Wendy, I think your brain is working fine this morning, and that was a great guess based on the clue I gave today. I'm realizing that it's far easier to post haiku than to guess. Tho I feel like I'm leading you guys on a wild goose chase somehow, so maybe I should just give the answer and move on.
Here's another hint:
you were not far off at all. it is a song title of ellis'.
remember, it is Monday!!!
Here's another hint:
you were not far off at all. it is a song title of ellis'.
remember, it is Monday!!!
"once we're inside, it's a carnival ride" ~ ellis paul
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I think I got it!
Friday Night
Did I get it
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Friday Night
my favorite one
followed by a couple more
I hope never end
Did I get it
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Yay! OK....here's another. This is a person.
I was young and brash
Immortal, or so I thought.
My family mourns.
Who am I
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I was young and brash
Immortal, or so I thought.
My family mourns.
Who am I
KarenZ
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Pseudo-yes.
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Excellent, Jela! You got it!
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Karen's could have also been Chris McCandless...I am reading "Into the Wild" and it is a very compelling tale.
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I've recently read 'Into the Wild' and thoroughly enjoyed the book which leaves you asking more questions about why people decide to 'go into the wild' - what is it that they are searching for? Perhaps they don't often know themselves what it is they are seeking.............as I mentioned on the old board Sean Penn is to direct/produce a film of the book and I shall look forward to seeing that one day.
Maybe Ellis will get the opportunity to record 'Chris McCandless' for the film? I hope so.
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Maybe Ellis will get the opportunity to record 'Chris McCandless' for the film? I hope so.
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